Help me with this title sentence from my son's book review...

[battlemaiden]

My son just finished Kidnapped and is writing his first book formal book review. He is a very imaginative kid and his starting sentence looks like this:

"Swords clash, guns fire! Kidnapped by Robert Louis Stevenson is one of the best books I've ever read."

How do you feel about the Swords clash! Guns fire! start? It isn't exactly grammatically correct but it is creative. He often writes like that. He likes to grab attention.

What do you think? I have to go over the rough draft with him in a little while.

Thanks.

Jo

[Jean in Newcastle]

Personally, I like it! I would change the last part though, to make it really part of the first. Something like, "Swords clash! Guns fire! Be part of the action when you read "Kidnapped" by Robert Louis Stevenson.